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1. What was specifically revised from one draft to another?
I changed the introduction by adding a paragraph at the beginning to better address the prompt. All conclusion sentences were changed to address my audience rather than state why the author of my article (Arthur Allen) is effective. I added more to the concluding paragraph so that it's not just one sentence.
2. Point to global changes: how did you reconsider your thesis or organization?
I did not change the overall organization or the thesis but I changed the context of the thesis so it answers the prompt better.
3. What led you to those changes? A reconsideration of audience? A shift in purpose?
I changed that because my rough draft analyzed why Allen was effective within the controversy of animal testing. The prompt required us to answer why our piece was or was not effective within our major. Thankfully, all the rhetorical strategies I chose fitted the new purpose well.
4. How do these changes better affect your credibility as an author?
Now I'm answering the prompt, which is always a good thing. The new conclusions also tie back to the overall purpose so that at the end of every paragraph so the essay never loses sight of its intended audience.
5. How will these changes better address the audience or venue?
Like in the last question, my new conclusions narrow the focus back to the intended audience rather than stating why Allen is effective in general.
6. Point to local changes: how did you reconsider sentence structure and style?
I added quite a bit of analysis to my essay. The new content has different word choice than the original draft and the new and old content is well mixed. It adds more variation and I don't repeat myself.
7. How will these changes assist your audience in understanding your purpose?
My new conclusions are addressed to my audience so it's always clear at the end of the paragraph why the strategy analyzed is effective within my major. The topic sentence of each paragraph is a general statement as to why the strategy is effective. As the paragraph goes on, it should be more clear to the audience why the strategy is effective.
8. Did you have to reconsider the conventions of the particular genre in which you are writing?
I didn't need to reconsider conventions but I did have to reevaluate my audience. My rough draft's audience was the same audience as my article's audience when my analysis should have had a more specific audience.
9. Finally, how does the process of reflection help you reconsider your identity as a writer?
Most of my writing process is sound. I need to understand the prompt better before trying to make a draft, though. The rough draft was salvageable for this assignment but it may not be for another prompt. Beyond that, this assignment went well, especially in the revision stage.
Reflection
Mehruba, Carter, and I all revised the conclusion and the intro. It was an assignment but my original is not nearly as good as the revised version. I revised a lot of the same things that they did.
I feel like our reflections are very similar as the first time we wrote out drafts, we really did not focus on the proper prompt. But once we finally realized who we were writing to, it became easier to whip out an essay addressing the proper audience on how an argument is made in the field. I also agree with you when you said knowing the prompt before writing your rough draft might be very helpful next time.
ReplyDeleteWe had similar revisions of both the introduction and the conclusion. My revisions had a similar purpose to better fit the audience I was writing for, in addition to our revisions both focusing on fitting the prompt better.
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