Copy for Paragraph Analysis

In this post, I will analyze the effectiveness of my paragraphs. Here's a link for my copy for paragraph analysis.

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All in all, my paragraphs aren't awful, but they are pretty bad. Most problems are from lack of transition. that really hurts the organization and cohesiveness of the paragraph, which then affects how well developed it seems. I will need to add better transitions to make my paragraphs stronger.